Dr. Who

First of all, let me congratulate you sir on a fine choice of subject on which to write about. I have been searching for a long time for a website ...

Very, very nice. This is without a doubt one of the best vampire stories I have read lately. I will be moving on to the sequel and I have no ...

This is very good. Definatley one of the best vampire stories I've ever read (aside from Twilight that is), but aside from a few minor gramatical and/or spelling corrections, I ...

I thought it was pretty good. The imagrey was good once you got going. However, you might want to work on showing and not just telling. For example: instead of ...

Show, don't tell. For example: instaed of the priest saying "after him!" you could say: "The priests sandles slap slap slaped againt the sandy road as he pursued the runaway ...